If you care, try switching many of these sentences from passive to active voice....

magwildwood on April 27, 2013 | parent | context | favorite | on: On the Fetishism of Capital and Prestige

If you care, try switching many of these sentences from passive to active voice. It helps to tighten up your writing. Sometimes it helps for dramatic effect, but excessive use of passive voice slows down your writing. Also, watch your redundancies and overuse of certain words.