I'm not sure if the creators of this show will read any HN comments, but this is HN so constructive criticism is expected...
I liked the pilot, I thought the length was perfect for an online show. I think the cast is pretty good too, which shows overall potential.
Things I would consider: The show's name (and the title typography) make you expect something like The Sopranos. Perhaps it should be changed to further differentiate itself from that show?
Plot-wise, the show should distance itself from LOST by excluding characters like 'them' or 'the others'. I could see how a studio type could dismiss this show as a LOST ripoff which could affect opportunities to raise funding.
Either way, I really like the idea of a show based on economic apocalypse (Peter Schiff callers asking about stocking guns and ammo is funny and ignites your imagination).
The dialogue about the demand for Wii's was pretty cool to me, though I could see how the use of Wii's and Helvetica t-shirts could attract super trendy tech-types while turning off others.
Also, words prone to pronunciation mess ups or confusions like 'edible' or 'eatable' throw the audience off (or maybe just me).
John August's blog is part of my regular reading. He is a great screen writer. If you are at all interested in screen writing or the business of Hollywood in general then I would highly recommend his blog.
I think them hosting on Vimeo is the reason why sponsors aren't taking them seriously. I mean what does it tell the sponsors when they can see that only 149 people "liked" the episode.
They should reupload to youtube, where they can avoid that "like" metric
This was only uploaded after they had fallen through getting a sponsor for the series. John August decided to show it to people because it was unlikely that it was going to be seen anywhere else.
Why would John August need a few grand from pg? That wouldn't fund anything in terms of making a TV program. For hackers it's worth more than a few grand because of connections and advice, but pg is nobody in Hollywood and his name attached would be worthless.
I liked the pilot, I thought the length was perfect for an online show. I think the cast is pretty good too, which shows overall potential.
Things I would consider: The show's name (and the title typography) make you expect something like The Sopranos. Perhaps it should be changed to further differentiate itself from that show?
Plot-wise, the show should distance itself from LOST by excluding characters like 'them' or 'the others'. I could see how a studio type could dismiss this show as a LOST ripoff which could affect opportunities to raise funding.
Either way, I really like the idea of a show based on economic apocalypse (Peter Schiff callers asking about stocking guns and ammo is funny and ignites your imagination).
The dialogue about the demand for Wii's was pretty cool to me, though I could see how the use of Wii's and Helvetica t-shirts could attract super trendy tech-types while turning off others.
Also, words prone to pronunciation mess ups or confusions like 'edible' or 'eatable' throw the audience off (or maybe just me).