Edit: I'm going to leave the below message but wanted to acknowledge that OP meant that the message could be more authentic. I misread.
How is this authentic? I was reading through and thinking how it's mincing words and making it sound like everyone is going to feel the same pain.
"This is one of the hardest messages I’ve ever had to send." Bad start. Why do CEOs make this about them?
"Unfortunately, this includes reducing the size of our workforce and parting ways "
"I know this will be difficult for us all" At least acknowledge that it's going to be more difficult for people who will lose their jobs.
"But today, my focus is on our people. " You're literally laying people off. First paragraph literally puts employees as the last priority. "my top priority has been to do what’s best for Bolt’s business, customers, and employees"
Stuff like this is business reality- just be really authentic. Say it sucks but we've had to do this. Don't talk about how hard it is for you or others who aren't directly impacted. It may be hard but it's way harder for the ones losing their jobs and cut the BS about focus being on people. It's clearly not.
You missed the takeaway of OP's message - OP is saying that the message, as it was broadcast, was not authentic because it was a long, meandering explanation, burying the part where people are losing their jobs in the last sentence of the third paragraph.
How is this authentic? I was reading through and thinking how it's mincing words and making it sound like everyone is going to feel the same pain.
"This is one of the hardest messages I’ve ever had to send." Bad start. Why do CEOs make this about them? "Unfortunately, this includes reducing the size of our workforce and parting ways " "I know this will be difficult for us all" At least acknowledge that it's going to be more difficult for people who will lose their jobs. "But today, my focus is on our people. " You're literally laying people off. First paragraph literally puts employees as the last priority. "my top priority has been to do what’s best for Bolt’s business, customers, and employees"
Stuff like this is business reality- just be really authentic. Say it sucks but we've had to do this. Don't talk about how hard it is for you or others who aren't directly impacted. It may be hard but it's way harder for the ones losing their jobs and cut the BS about focus being on people. It's clearly not.